Currently, I am most concerned about scene 7 (beginning on p. 20). I think the requested elements are present...but I don't think the scene does a very good job of conveying the story it is meant to tell. I am not sure how best to address it, but I think I need more direct interactions between the rescued thralls and the outlaws to really make this scene work.
Okay, I have made only minor edits to this scene, but I shifted some of the dialogue around so that the diminished numbers of the settlement is now gradually revealed and more shocking to both the outlaws and the viewers. Hopefully, that makes this more effective than it was before.