Script Discussion: S07E12

Here is the Episode Outline:

The Silmarillion Film Project
Season 7, Episode 12

Central conflict:
Protagonist: Uldor
A-Plot: Uldor’s betrayal and the death of Ulfang
B-Plot:
C-Plot:
Frame:.
FA 472

Teaser: Frame

Act I : FA 472 - Eastern Front
Scene 1: East Beleriand - Maedhros prepares for the coming battle. They want to begin the fight at dawn of the day of the first full moon after midsummer. Ulfang and Maedhros planning with Ulfang’s generals. Uldor not included; feels slighted as the ‘official messenger’ not knowing what is going on. Ulfang knocks him down a peg; says it’s his job to carry messages, not give orders. Maedhros meets the Easterling generals and gifts them daggers (ie, it was a diplomatic meeting, not a strategy council).

Scene 2: East Beleriand - Uldor returns to his tent, and…Sauron is there??? Sauron is dressed like an Easterling soldier. Uldor has questions about how Sauron got there; Sauron says he should have more interesting questions. Sauron talks about the lands they were promised - the elves won’t be giving them those. In fact, they will exploit them and let them be killed in battle, and give them nothing. If you want your lands..you’re going to need to get that from Morgoth, who will reward you after the battle. Ulfang will say ‘this’.

Scene 3: East Beleriand - Galadriel gifts Bor young horses, who can be trained for chariots in the future. She has estel that there will be a longterm relationship in the future after the battle, with this ‘fourth house’ of the Edain. She is ‘planting seeds’ for the future. When he understands her gift, he reacts emotionally - he’s touched that she values their friendship this much.

Scene 4: Ulfang’s Tent in the Easterling Camp - Caranthir and Ulfang enter Ulfang’s tent, and get into a bit of a heated discussion. Uldor is waiting patiently for his father to return, but doesn’t interrupt the argument. Caranthir feels slighted; Ulfang feels not obligated to coddle him and make him feel better. Caranthir makes an emphatic point by stabbing a table with his dagger, and leaves in a huff. Uldor confronts Ulfang, challenging the alliance with the Elves and their promised lands. Ulfang says what Sauron said he would. In the heat of the moment, Uldor kills his father by stabbing him in the back with Caranthir’s dagger. He sneaks out of the tent (not through the door) in a panic.

Act II :
Scene 5: Easterling Camp - Uldor comes back to his tent, still in a panic, and frantically washes the blood off his face/hands/clothing. Someone sits up behind him, and he whirls around, worried it’s Sauron back again. Instead, it is Ulfast waking up, and he softly calls out to him inquiring what’s happening. Uldor pauses his rushed cleaning frenzy, realizing that he is going to have to convince his brother of his alibi. He tells Ulfast that he’s worried, because he overheard their father arguing with ‘that elf’ Caranthir, and then he came back here to wake Ulfast to go check on him.
Uldor and Ulfast return to the tent, and bring the guards in with them. Ulfang’s body is discovered, and the dagger sticking out of him is elvish. The guards confirm that the last person to leave the tent was the elf Caranthir, and no one else entered until Ulfast and Uldor arrived.

Scene 6: Eastern Front - Caranthir goes to Maedhros and reveals his argument with Ulfang. Maedhros is not impressed that Caranthir is picking fights with their allies. Caranthir is prideful and likes to be in charge. Ulfang is dismissive of people who aren’t involved or useful.

Scene 7: Easterling Camp - Ulfang’s death is known and everyone is in chaos about it. . Galadriel and Bor arrive in the Easterling Camp and react to news of Ulfang’s death. Galadriel is shocked and wants to get to the bottom of it. Bor encourages her to let the people of Ulfang handle the situation. Yes, it’s shocking, but sometimes Men who are fine and hale the day before will drop dead. Uldor answers the generals’ questions about the death of his father, and makes his role the go-between for the generals and Maedhros.

Scene 8: Eastern Front - Uldor meets with Maedhros. He explains that the army won’t be ready to march as scheduled because of Ulfang’s sudden death. No one can replace him. Uldor lets slip some less than flattering comment about Ulfang. Maedros attempts to be empathetic about his complicated relationship with his larger-than-life father.

Act III :
Scene 9: Easterling Camp - Uldor and his brothers interrupt a meeting of the generals. They seek to convince the generals that the best move is to secure their claim on the lands of East Beleriand.

Scene 10: Maedhros gets the news that the Western Front has engaged Morgoth’s forces, and his presence is requested on the battlefield IMMEDIATELY. Maedhros sends the word that all the forces must move out now.

Scene 11: Easterling Camp - Uldor tries to recruit Bor to his cause. Uldor explains that Ulfang was killed because he was asking questions about the land they were promised. Bor thinks this doesn’t sound quite right - that doesn’t sound like Ulfang (who would have gotten any questions or concerns he had dealt with up front…and he was never a grasping man.) He suspects that Uldor is making this story up to persuade him, and thus resists persuasion. Bor decides to go with Maedhros’ army.

Scene 12: Easterling Camp - Ulfast gives a speech to the gathered soldiers after the elven army has left. He reveals that Ulfang was killed by a prince of the elves, and that their so-called ‘allies’ cannot be trusted.

Act IV: Now the timeline catches up to the end of Episode 11
Scene 13: Anfauglith - Maedhros’ forces arrive. Bor’s chariots pull ahead and engage to support Fingon’s forces, which were beleaguered. Bor and Galadriel having fun! Bor impressed by Galadriel in battle.

Scene 14: Western Front - Cheering - yay chariots! Gondolindrim arrive to help Fingon. Húrin.

Scene 15: Maedhros in battle - AND THE ORCS FLED BEFORE HIS FACE

Scene 16: The Easterlings arrive at the battle. At first, the elves (including Maedhros) are relieved. Bor looks concerned by this development. And then Uldor orders the massacre of the Dwarves - they take out the Siege engines as well. Sauron watches (from the place where Rochallor died).

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Here is the link to the working document for Ep12. The set up for the murder of Ulfang was quite tricky to choreograph. I'm not sure I have it right. I have insinuated that Caranthir was the Feanorian brother who had the most direct dealings with Ulfang and his army in the preparation phase. As a consequence he feels that he should be in charge, which sparks the friction and argument with Ulfang. When Uldor witnesses Caranthir threatening Ulfang (resulting in the dagger in the table), he takes this as further confirmation of why they shouldn't trust the Elves. I wanted to make sure that the final confronation between Uldor and Ulfang is not just a rehash of the scene I wrote between them when they crossed into Beleriand (where Ulfang knocks Uldor down a peg for wanting to gain things without effort, accusing him of trying to be a nepo baby essentially). Here Ulfang calls Uldor out for selfishness and says he will never gain the lands and glory he seeks, while at the same time focusing on the existential threat of Morgoth rather than on the gain of territory for Sudh-Beredin (confirming what Sauron had suggested).

I wanted to continue to paint Uldor as a rather weak character overall so his stabbing of his father is kind of out of the blue and is immediately followed by remorse and fear. He's not a murderer at heart. But between him and Ulfast, they will turn the situation to their advantage.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/11GLfvNVABxkGBvwjfSpt1o0HahAMzpolCzwlnMdFOko/edit?tab=t.0

I've been without power at home for about 36 hours and counting. Have managed to make my way to a cafe today to charge my computer. Will keep plugging away but feedback would be welcome on the first part, which I think is the trickiest part of this episode.

EDIT: Power went back on after about 43 hours. So happy to have the internet back!
 
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I listened to Bret Devereaux on the PPP last night, and he had some good comments about how chariots were (or seemed to be) used in ancient warfare, and how many people get it wrong. Even just listening to the description of what they were like (in size and make) and what they were or weren't capable of was an eye-opener. I'm sure @Nicholas Palazzo knows a bunch of this, but I certainly didn't.
 
@David_M_R I don't know if I will have time to listen to the podcast before finishing the script (which I expect to be working on all weekend). If you have particular things you'd like to see in the chariot charge (or want me to avoid), please let me know.
 
@Ilana Mushin Chariots tended to be very wide and light: you can't fight with a sword from one, eg leaning over and slashing people next to the wheel. The wheel-base was wide to avoid tipping when turning. And as has been discussed, the driver was usually lower-class, and the upper-class owner did the ranged fighting with bow and arrow or javelin. Sometimes there was even a third person, a shield-holder (also lower class). These were the biggest takeways for me. Perhaps @Nicholas Palazzo can chime in with any other observations.
 
@Ilana Mushin Chariots tended to be very wide and light: you can't fight with a sword from one, eg leaning over and slashing people next to the wheel. The wheel-base was wide to avoid tipping when turning. And as has been discussed, the driver was usually lower-class, and the upper-class owner did the ranged fighting with bow and arrow or javelin. Sometimes there was even a third person, a shield-holder (also lower class). These were the biggest takeways for me. Perhaps @Nicholas Palazzo can chime in with any other observations.
So spears and bows?
 
I'm assuming both Trolls and Wargs on the field by the time Bór gets there. I can't remember - was Bór supposed to be injured in ep12 or13?
 
I need to know how long it is estimated to take between the army marching from Ladros to when they reach the field of battle (Anfauglith). I'm assuming not too much time but how much? For context. At the moment I have the Fëanorian army leaving the encampment in the evening, so they will march all night and be coming over the horizon at dawn (the text says the '3rd hour of the morning', but do we have to stick with this? I can alter the time that they leave Ladros (sooner or later) and/or have them arriving indeed 3 hours after sunrise if that doesn't work.
 
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I've finished the draft of the full script now so please give feedback. I imagine this needs to go to Corey in a couple of days but I'll be able to make tweaks over the next couple of days. The final act is mostly action with very little dialogue. I'm no expert on warfare so please feel free to add or change parts of the logistics of the battle. Apart from Ulfang, I killed Elhrun and Borlach (one of Bór's sons) and wounded Curufin. That leaves plenty of moralities and woundings for ep13. Here is the link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/11GLfvNVABxkGBvwjfSpt1o0HahAMzpolCzwlnMdFOko/edit?tab=t.0
 
Usually Sindarin. Quenya when appropriate. I do think it would be nice to work in as much of the Doom of Mandos as possible into these late season episode titles.

Tears unnumbered ye shall shed; and the Valar will fence Valinor against you, and shut you out, so that not even the echo of your lamentation shall pass over the mountains. On the House of Fëanor the wrath of the Valar lieth from the West unto the uttermost East, and upon all that will follow them it shall be laid also. Their Oath shall drive them, and yet betray them, and ever snatch away the very treasures that they have sworn to pursue. To evil end shall all things turn that they begin well; and by treason of kin unto kin, and the fear of treason, shall this come to pass. The Dispossessed shall they be for ever.
Ye have spilled the blood of your kindred unrighteously and have stained the land of Aman. For blood ye shall render blood, and beyond Aman ye shall dwell in Death's shadow. For though Eru appointed to you to die not in Eä, and no sickness may assail you, yet slain ye may be, and slain ye shall be: by weapon and by torment and by grief; and your houseless spirits shall come then to Mandos. There long shall ye abide and yearn for your bodies, and find little pity though all whom ye have slain should entreat for you. And those that endure in Middle-earth and come not to Mandos shall grow weary of the world as with a great burden, and shall wane, and become as shadows of regret before the younger race that cometh after.

So naturally Episode 13 will be "Unnumbered Tears" and if this one is "The Fear of Treason" that fits well. Nírnaeth Arnœdiad is Sindarin, so this episode title should be Sindarin as well.

"daedelos" is Sindarin for fear, dread, shadow of fear....but it has a connotation of horror, rather than simply a concern. "thoss" might be a more straightforward translation for fear. It is used in the context "fear of death" and I think that is comparable to "fear of treason". A certain amount of fear and dread associated with it, but not running away screaming or quaking in terror or anything.

I don't know how to say treason in Sindarin, but there is a word for "betray." Betray as a verb is "gweria-" and Betrayer as a noun (but the person, not the concept of betrayal) is "gwarth". Ulwarth, the other brother, is thus named "ugly betrayer" in Sindarin. The plural of gwarth is gwairth. Another Sindarin word for traitor is "gurgof". "sadron" is a word for trusty follower, loyal companion, so we could put u- on that as a prefix meaning...not. So, unfaithful companions might be "usedryn"

So, "i thoss" = the fear

"of the" is likely going to trigger mixed mutation, I think?

i= the (singular)
in= the (plural)
en = of the


But "guruthos" means "fear of death" so we can probably coin a single word that means "fear of betrayal"



(I'll come back later)
 
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