Sorry for the delay. Here is the first draft of the script for this episode!
SFP S06E01 Script
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Anyone is welcome to read it over and add comments to help edit it prior to next week's podcast. We will need to complete the editing process by Tuesday evening in order to give the hosts enough time to read it over. So, we have one week available to work on the edits.
Suggestions can be added directly to the document by typing in it or by adding comments on the side. Please flag anything that you find confusing, disappointing, or not fitting in Middle-earth. And let me know if there was an idea from the podcast or script discussion that you feel is missing or not fully realized in this draft!
The scenes that are highlighted in blue are a little short; I can add more to those scenes to make them longer. The other scenes are mostly the correct length. The frame scenes are missing, so the full document should be roughly 55 pages at this time; it is only 47.
A note on the timing:
The first scene takes place shortly after the end of the Dagor Bragollach, and is meant to feel timeless.The next two scenes take place in winter, so the setting should be bleak.Then there is a timeskip, so that we meet the outlaws in summer.The rest of the episode takes place in a very condensed timespan - a matter of weeks, at most a month.And then the ending montage is an unspecified amount of time in the future.The season change can, perhaps, represent a shift from bleak despair to cautious hope, but also is meant to allow Sauron time to master necromancy and build his army of ghosts (offscreen).
Also, typo and grammar corrections are appreciated, but not the most important thing to focus on right away. Don't worry about 'orphaned' speaker cues; I'll make that correction after the edited draft is ready.
Thank you for any assistance you are able to give!
Currently, I am most concerned about scene 7 (beginning on p. 20). I think the requested elements are present...but I don't think the scene does a very good job of conveying the story it is meant to tell. I am not sure how best to address it, but I think I need more direct interactions between the rescued thralls and the outlaws to really make this scene work.
Thanks for the suggestions!
So far in this project, fine lace is more associated with the Vanyar. So, while Meril could be doing that, I wouldn't necessarily want to associate her with the bobbin lace technique.
Meril is one of the Sindar who met Orodreth at the Mereth Aderthad. She's had to help him through some difficult times, with the loss of his mother, and now his father. So, she is supportive, and like her husband, is more of a healer than a fighter.
Sindarin dog names:
Tim - spark
Tim the Dog! Yes, please
I am not really sure how we got from 'they have paper', to 'that requires a paper mill and bleaching'.
I have named the dog Nidhôl in the episode 3 script - one of Marie's suggestions which is roughly equivalent to the English "William".In this episode, a background 'camp dog' is mentioned in the Tarn Aeluin scenes, but no name is given. The dog will also appear in Episodes 2 & 3, so we'll see if it gets a name there.
I have named the dog Nidhôl in the episode 3 script - one of Marie's suggestions which is roughly equivalent to the English "William".
Using logic? - an old human bad habit?
(The arrival of paper making in Europe - with the addition of the invention of printing - had enormous cultural consequences. As such there is still a collective awareness when - even in a pseudo-historic story - it is "still too soon for paper". [Then you will get the "cognitive disissonance" face from a big part of your audience with the question: "Paper?!!!" written all over it . I just assume you would like to avoid that.]).
But o.k. Will save this for the probs thread.
The courtesy of this hall is somewhat lessened of late...
Ach, instead of being annoyed - do just prove me wrong...
My style might not suit you, but still I do bring the discussion forward.
If you think my ideas stray to far from the direction you find they should focus on, then set this direction clearer.
BTW after having reread the script for several times now - I do realy like the kingly carying Thingol MithLuin. Good work. Seems you have not forgotten the objections several of us had about over-jerkifying him. Thanks.