Rob Harding
Well-Known Member
Okay, so she resists the quest. That’s interesting but it comes a while into their interactions. We need to know why she would resist the quest or else it comes from nowhere.
As you say, she at one point considers not returning to Doriath. But we’ve already seen her stay in Doriath to help maintain its culture as an act of good in the world.
So she goes from believing remaining in her home is the right course to affect t the world to understanding helping other people’s snd uniting with them will bring change. Elves snd Men coning together bring a big theme anyway. And contrasts her father. But what is she leaving. You want to really show it as a kind of paradise she’s giving up but also plant seeds that leaving is the better thing.
As Beren becomes less hubristic snd learns to lean on her after being a survivalist relying on himself, she starts to rely on him and become more than just a member of her own people. By leaning into one another, that’s how they overcome the darkness of the world and inspire others later.
So you need a moment when it seems like they could separate snd turn back but don’t. You have a real long dark night of the soul moment when Beren is captured. Maybe Luthien is considering staying. Been went off on this crazy quest. He’s trying to rely on his own strength to escape. He realises he can’t. She heard he’s in trouble. Somehow we could have him call for her (mystical or perhaps speaks to a nightingale???) and she catches wind. He chooses her help snd she’s chooses to leave to him. Snd from that moment we know they are in this for the long haul and anything is possible
In that situation his hot headed passion, his desire for her, put him on this deadly quest and maybe she realises that is a problem for the first time. Maybe the thing she loves about this mortal isn’t a good thing. And her love for her people could be a thing he sees in her. She has a family she is loyal too, a thing he craves and recognises. She is a kindred spirit. But it seems she chooses them over her. End of an episode. Then they struggle apart, Beren is captured, Luthien suddenly finds Menegroth is no longer enough. And she chooses him and he chooses her.
I’m just trying to work out a way that this plot can only happen with these two people. You don’t want a plot that could just swap out the protagonists for another person and it still works
On the note of her being ‘merely mortal’ I think that dynamic should be flipped. Maybe Luthien fears he wants her because she is an eternal enchantress but really he loves her for what she is. So she is able to make that choice when she realises he was telling the truth. Bringing out the best in each other. Not sure how to visualise that realisation though, if you want to use that angle
As you say, she at one point considers not returning to Doriath. But we’ve already seen her stay in Doriath to help maintain its culture as an act of good in the world.
So she goes from believing remaining in her home is the right course to affect t the world to understanding helping other people’s snd uniting with them will bring change. Elves snd Men coning together bring a big theme anyway. And contrasts her father. But what is she leaving. You want to really show it as a kind of paradise she’s giving up but also plant seeds that leaving is the better thing.
As Beren becomes less hubristic snd learns to lean on her after being a survivalist relying on himself, she starts to rely on him and become more than just a member of her own people. By leaning into one another, that’s how they overcome the darkness of the world and inspire others later.
So you need a moment when it seems like they could separate snd turn back but don’t. You have a real long dark night of the soul moment when Beren is captured. Maybe Luthien is considering staying. Been went off on this crazy quest. He’s trying to rely on his own strength to escape. He realises he can’t. She heard he’s in trouble. Somehow we could have him call for her (mystical or perhaps speaks to a nightingale???) and she catches wind. He chooses her help snd she’s chooses to leave to him. Snd from that moment we know they are in this for the long haul and anything is possible
In that situation his hot headed passion, his desire for her, put him on this deadly quest and maybe she realises that is a problem for the first time. Maybe the thing she loves about this mortal isn’t a good thing. And her love for her people could be a thing he sees in her. She has a family she is loyal too, a thing he craves and recognises. She is a kindred spirit. But it seems she chooses them over her. End of an episode. Then they struggle apart, Beren is captured, Luthien suddenly finds Menegroth is no longer enough. And she chooses him and he chooses her.
I’m just trying to work out a way that this plot can only happen with these two people. You don’t want a plot that could just swap out the protagonists for another person and it still works
On the note of her being ‘merely mortal’ I think that dynamic should be flipped. Maybe Luthien fears he wants her because she is an eternal enchantress but really he loves her for what she is. So she is able to make that choice when she realises he was telling the truth. Bringing out the best in each other. Not sure how to visualise that realisation though, if you want to use that angle
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